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Malky McGookin:
This is another one I'm not too sure of, after I've drawn it.
Don't be diplomatic about it, if it doesn't work for you, say so

Roger Kettle:
Malky, this is the first time I've had doubts about one of your cartoons. To begin with, it wasn't clear to me who was actually saying the line. Secondly, and pretty importantly, I'm not sure what you mean. Is she saying that okay, he's got masculine hands but he's ugly? Is she saying the opposite? I'm sorry but this doesn't work for me. Please God, don't start analysing MY stuff!

Malky McGookin:
Nah, I do agree. Often I have to re-visit a cartoon the next day, load it in Photoshop and see it afresh, as though I'm a customer.

I performed that exercise this morning and it didn't groove me at all.
One for the bin, I think, but in true Scottish style I have two "babe" figures I can re-use in a future cartoon.
The great SAX had most of his gags set at parties, or with figures in armchairs

I'm doing an armchair gag right now, and I'll throw this one at you to see how it works text only.

Affluent father sits in armchair reading paper. Spoilt son stands alongside, obviously unhappy about something.

Father: Piers, consider how lucky you are. Starving children in Africa only have Playstation 2

Tarquin Thunderthighs lll:
Talk about capitulation! The rest of us didn't even get a chance to stick the boot in.

Okay, on the second gag, Malky - it's very good, but I came up with it the day before yesterday. Smirk-smirk!

Tarquin Thunderthighs lll:
But just out of curiosity, how would you have drawn it?

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